Lost Shadow: Perspective Issues

As I try to draw this thing, I've rediscovered the challenges of drawing something in perspective.

As in, it's really hard.  Probably too tough for someone who hasn't done any serious drawing in around 3 years.

So to combat that, I've tried to brush up on my drawing skills and figure out how to make it all work again.

This here is a study for perspective on the opening panel of the comic.  There are multiple positions, but I think the one where the man is all sprawled out works best to convey that sense of deadness.  However, the angle is too high compared to the scenery I drew, so I got some help from my teacher.

He suggested something that looked more like this.  The angle is low enough so that the character's left arm is no longer visible.  It looks better, but still a little off somehow.  I'll continue hammering it out, and hope that it looks... okay by the end.